The Battle is Real
By: Susan Deborah Schiller aka Tender Lily Photo Source: Unknown
Previous WeWriWa Snippet (The Sacred Dance of Life)
No one heard her muffled cries but him. He told her it would always be that way. And then he grinned, one side of his mouth twisted upward – but it held no warmth and made Laura shiver.
A second later she was pinned to the cold, hard ground, overwhelmed by his seemingly superhuman strength. Laura discovered she was not as powerless as she had thought, for suddenly she became aware of sewing shears grasped firmly in her right hand. Nearly breathless from his crushing weight, she stabbed him deep into his thigh. With a rage fueled by 20-years of subservience to this monster, she threw the beast over her head and his body crashed heavily down into the ravine.
Stunned at her victory, Laura raced to the road, dodging branches as she fled to freedom, grateful her feet knew the way, because her heart and mind were already numb from shock.
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This is a true story from my blog that I'm slowly rewriting into fiction. Laura is dreaming in this segment, and discovering that her dream life closely parallels and mirrors her conscious life, supplying her with uncanny wisdom that fuels her journey to freedom. Thank you for any wisdom or guidance you may have – I appreciate you reading!
Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly blog-hop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at Weekend Writing Warriors, then post 8 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between 12:00 noon Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other, read, comment, critique, encourage–all those great things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
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Susan
Wow, a snippet? Waiting for the story to be written. I am sure it will be therapeutic.
Thank you for sharing.
An excellent action sequence there.
Thank you for stopping by and sharing your feedback, Stevie!
That's so good. She finally escaped.
Your words made this action very powerful.
Thanks so much, Linda! 🙂
Powerful snippet. What a wonderful idea to take tragedy and rewrite the ending in fiction. I can see how that would help the healing process.
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Thanks so much, Cindy! You're kinda close… but…
Very powerful and vivid! Nicely done!
Thanks so much, Mona, for visiting today! 🙂
Go Laura!!!
Thanks for visiting, Elaine 🙂
Go Laura! She's really something 🙂
Hi Danita – thanks for sharing!
Wow! A really powerful snippet! I literally have no words, but please believe me when I say you got a definte emotional response!
You’ve encouraged me immensely – I’m so new to this – thanks!
Great scene. Love that last paragraph showing how even she is in disbelief at her victory!
Thanks so much, Ann, for sharing – I truly appreciate you!
Hi Susan
I was sure I left a comment yesterday – but I guess not. This is a fantastic, evocative scene – very well done.
Susan, thanks so much for visiting today – your feedback helps a lot! 🙂
Wow, powerful and did I read it right, that this is based on a true story?
Yes, it’s based on a true story – it’s like one of those stories that’s “too strange to be true” so I’m trying it in fiction form.
anger can give us superhuman strength
I believe you’re right, Sue! Thanks so much 🙂
YESS!! ::pumps fist:: Go, Laura! Great snippet, very evocative.
Thanks so much… I really appreciate your feedback – I’m new to this!
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